I've edited it yet again, but haven't changed anything really structural, just took out words that aren't neccessary (just, so, rather, very, in spite of, for a moment) I'm contemplating printing it, and not touching it for a month, trying to not even think about it, which means I'll have to write on something else to keep me from meddling.

Okay, I've hit 'print'. No turning back now...